Wednesday, 12 February 2014

Kate 100WC

On a very hot day, everyone came together in a neighbourhood called Oak Hill. So they all came together to change the neighbourhood so they agreed to travel to the council to see the mayor so they made it to the council and saw the mayor. One person told the mayor, "could we be able to have a waterslide and golf course?". Another man told the mayor, " would we be able to put swimming pool as well". "Sure", the mayor said excitedly. But the mayor wasn't quite sure if he could pay that much money. So he thought and thought and thought, "alright" the mayor said. But meetings were held across the country to find an answer.
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5 comments:

  1. Anonymous16 February 2014 at 16:52

    hi kate love the story from andreas

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  2. Anonymous16 February 2014 at 20:37

    Kate, thank you for this piece for the 100WC. You have created a story with a dilemma - the Mayor and the Council want to give the people what they want, but where is the money coming from? I love the different ways that you have started your sentences but particularly like how you have used a time connective 'On a very hot day...' at the beginning. Adverbs such as 'excitedly' help the reader to build a picture as they read. To make your writing EVEN better, look again at the rules for writing speech especially capital letters and punctuation.
    I really enjoyed reading this and you should be very proud of your writing skills. Well done.
    Mrs Neale (Team 100WC)

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  3. Anonymous17 February 2014 at 16:38

    Hi Kate, I really like the story. From James

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  4. Anonymous17 February 2014 at 17:01

    Hi Kate,

    I understand why your town wanted a swimming pool in that hot weather,

    Lauren

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  5. Anonymous18 February 2014 at 22:46

    Hi Kate,
    I enjoyed your story. It was very realistic, because I could imagine it happening.

    Jemma

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